Santiago is the capital of Chile and like a globalized
capital city, has a lot of problems that affect his entire population. Firstly, It’s
the most concentrated city in Chile and all the spaces are hyper populated, it’s
common to see in these days how big structures are rising up everywhere lodging
a thousands of people in each one, in very narrow spaces.
Secondly, Santiago has a stress of “green areas”
for the same reason that I mentioned in first place, the huge zones of built
areas have reduced the natural landscape to a little portion of the city. In some
communes (generally the poorest ones) the percent of parks or squares are greatly reduced in comparison with the percent related to the built areas, for this reason everyday we see a scenery all in grey colors.
Finally, the city of Santiago it’s a so
globalized one that all the events on it happen extremely quickly and the
people tends to be always stressed. And as we know, the stress bring with it the anger and the disgust.
For example, when you do something as simple as shopping or when you’re using the public transport
you could see how hard-set people are and how they fight with any other for
no reason at all.
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… IT has a lot of problems that affect his ITS entire population. (Santiago is not a HE, so no “his” here)
…it’s common to see in these days …
… that I mentioned in THE first place,
…the percentAGE of parks or squares [are] IS greatly reduced …
Finally, the city of Santiago [it’s] IS a so globalized one that all the events on it happen extremely quickly and [the] people tends to be always stressed. And as we know, [the] stress bringS with it [the] anger and [the] disgust. …
… mainly derived from [his] ITS condition of a capital that has been insertED in a context of globalization characterized by accelerated flows and a need for iMMediacy, and it's so true that in [this] THESE days [its] IT IS kind difficult [to] FOR us TOlive here, but we have to
I believe the structure of your text is much better now, so the next step is to pay more attention to your edition.
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